I like it.
Tips:
-add some metaphores and similes (they make the poem more appealing to your audience)
-some of your rhymes don't rhyme so well, you may wish to revise them
-check your spelling
otherwise it's great.
I like it.
Tips:
-add some metaphores and similes (they make the poem more appealing to your audience)
-some of your rhymes don't rhyme so well, you may wish to revise them
-check your spelling
otherwise it's great.
