Year ten sonnet, is it good?

[bill nomnom]

Writing a sonnet, to speak my own mind.
To toss and turn, in sleepless nights of pain.
Dreaming nay dreading what has come to bind.
The past, the present, of which has been my bane.
To long has it been since those time of glee,
The dancing, cheering, ranting and raving.
Said that time shall not pass, if only that be,
All that's left now is a wood engraving.
The bright moon was high on the fateful night.
Trees whispering in the wind as we raged.
Shouting, yelling of what had come to Highten.
Twas to late for returns or to turn page.
What was done is done in our discontent
And has hurt us both, but to what extent......

 

[Nick Kcin]

As sonnets being my personal favorite poems, I must say, I like it very much. Some lines could maybe be redone, but that is entirely up to you. I do very much like the last two. Very well written. Very well written indeed.

 

[shapokliyak]

The sonnet is perfectly suited to modern ideas. It's a beautiful form. As such, there's no need to put in anachronisms and language that isn't part of modern vernacular. Words like "nay," "bane," "glee," and "twas" make you sound pretentious. They don't add to the meaning of the poem. Use language and phrasing that comes more naturally to you. I'd also recommend using iambic pentameter. The first line is in anapestic meter, and that's not well suited to the gravity of the subject matter.