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Its a poem I wrote it in Art class because i was bored its called "Riding over rubble"
"Riding over rubble"
Riding over rubble
the tires are flat
the engine is dieing
and the horizon is black
once this this thing breaks down
there's no turing back
I'm fighting for breath
as the smoke closes in
the fire burns hot
and blackens my skin
the thunder sounds like elephants
and the lightning shines bright
in my own world
where theres never any light
Hows is it?
its one complete poem with 3 stanzas
if you could give it a grade ( A+, A, A-, B+ ect.ect.) what would it be?
how can i fix it?
what part do you like, what don't you like?
"Riding over rubble"
Riding over rubble
the tires are flat
the engine is dieing
and the horizon is black
once this this thing breaks down
there's no turing back
I'm fighting for breath
as the smoke closes in
the fire burns hot
and blackens my skin
the thunder sounds like elephants
and the lightning shines bright
in my own world
where theres never any light
Hows is it?
its one complete poem with 3 stanzas
if you could give it a grade ( A+, A, A-, B+ ect.ect.) what would it be?
how can i fix it?
what part do you like, what don't you like?