wrote a poem about my (deceased) dad, comments?

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i wrote it bc its almost his birthday (hes been gone many yrs now) but bc im not in the best of mood & im only 19, so its probably not the best poem... its not really finished, seems kinda broken. but any comments?

i still cry
i still shed tears
i still wonder why
i havent had you these past 10 years

it may have been awhile
but my smile still breaks
and through my journeys miles
i have made many mistakes

ive grown up now daddy
but i still feel so small
are you disappoined in me
that ive built up this wall

i try to be
someone you will love
daddy, do you still love me
am i a daughter you are proud of

if you can hear
at night i pray
my memories havent disappeared
but i want back whats been taken away
 
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