Would you mind commenting on a poem please?

Aspira

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I'm still getting back into my poetic form, please be honest when you comment.

Guided but i'll be never familiar,
as I'm pulled towards a similar trail.
I will for light, but my eyes betray my blight,
becoming barriers, halting any scene.
Surrounding, resounding, colours by numbers.
Only seeing, a catalogue of past views,
having to recycle, replace to estimate
what rushes to me, falls at the last hurdle.
My mind lost it's paint, my eyes, a blank canvas.
 
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