"O Eurydice, he wails, damning the gods
Through the broken trees, down the twisted hill
His hands unable to grasp what's his, despite all odds
But on terms he must trust what is his,
shant be still"
this is just one stanza from a poem i'm writing
the last line is seperated into two parts, because i couldn't find a way to shorten it to ten syllables
would this be okay? or does it ruin the rhyme scheme or the rules?
does anyone know a way to write it?
basically what i was trying to say is 'he could have her on one condition, if he trusted that she was behind him'
it's about the greek myth of orpheus.
Through the broken trees, down the twisted hill
His hands unable to grasp what's his, despite all odds
But on terms he must trust what is his,
shant be still"
this is just one stanza from a poem i'm writing
the last line is seperated into two parts, because i couldn't find a way to shorten it to ten syllables
would this be okay? or does it ruin the rhyme scheme or the rules?
does anyone know a way to write it?
basically what i was trying to say is 'he could have her on one condition, if he trusted that she was behind him'
it's about the greek myth of orpheus.