My book is called "The Secret of the Sea"
Main character is an 18-year-old girl who has gone travelling with her boyfriend only to (almost) die when she has an accident diving off the coast of Australia. I won't tell you what the secret about the sea is
"I felt the tide toss me around as if i were just a leaf in a hurricane of wind. Spinning in a whirlpool of blue i clambered for the surface kicking my legs, trying to escape the black of the water below which was rising to consume me. What i wouldn’t give to taste the cool air in my throat, to be on land where i could be drunk on oxygen.
With one last kick for freedom i felt my legs give in, the darkness of the water washed over me as i closed my eyes and waited for my watery end to come. Down and down i sank into the depths. It surprised me how slowly death came. I’d heard people say your whole life flashes before you in the moments before you meet your maker but all i could hear was the voices in my head asking why me? My life hadn’t even begun. This trip was supposed to be the beginning of a journey for me and it had already come to an abrupt end. Then faces... Mum... Dad... little Josh. And finally Dylan. Dylan. Why didn’t i tell him i loved him when i had the chance? Why? Why? The voice kept questioning... I watched the two small bubbles rise from my mouth up into the blue... to the surface that was out of my reach... everything was black..."
I'm not sure about the drunk on oxygen part. Any suggestions to help improve this would be much appreciated.
Main character is an 18-year-old girl who has gone travelling with her boyfriend only to (almost) die when she has an accident diving off the coast of Australia. I won't tell you what the secret about the sea is
"I felt the tide toss me around as if i were just a leaf in a hurricane of wind. Spinning in a whirlpool of blue i clambered for the surface kicking my legs, trying to escape the black of the water below which was rising to consume me. What i wouldn’t give to taste the cool air in my throat, to be on land where i could be drunk on oxygen.
With one last kick for freedom i felt my legs give in, the darkness of the water washed over me as i closed my eyes and waited for my watery end to come. Down and down i sank into the depths. It surprised me how slowly death came. I’d heard people say your whole life flashes before you in the moments before you meet your maker but all i could hear was the voices in my head asking why me? My life hadn’t even begun. This trip was supposed to be the beginning of a journey for me and it had already come to an abrupt end. Then faces... Mum... Dad... little Josh. And finally Dylan. Dylan. Why didn’t i tell him i loved him when i had the chance? Why? Why? The voice kept questioning... I watched the two small bubbles rise from my mouth up into the blue... to the surface that was out of my reach... everything was black..."
I'm not sure about the drunk on oxygen part. Any suggestions to help improve this would be much appreciated.