Hi, i was assigned a composition, i have completed it and reread it but im not sure if im doing something wrong. I'm sure my spelling is all correct, it's the punctuation that bothers me, we where asked to pick a topic i picked (Most memorable day of your life) it's to consist of 3 to 5 paragraphs, i used four, and of course an introduction, body and conclusion. Just read it for me and make any corrections need thank you so much 
oh and i did indent it just wont show it for some reason anyway thank you allot
It was the day I crossed paths with the most important person in my life, my best friend. It was four years ago on a cold evening in October, just a day before hallows eve one of my most cherished holidays. There was a party being held at my school for the early celebration of Halloween, I was so excited and completely unaware of the friend that awaited my presence. I walked outside and awaited my transportation, I could not take the excitement it was eating me alive. I’m on my way to the hallow edifice to see what surprises lurk within. Before I could no longer suffer the endless anticipation, we arrived at the party, it was everything I thought it would be, the lights where darkened, the halls where full of sinister surprises, the party favors where delicious and the night was young.
Now, I find myself aimlessly walking around the crowd looking for my girlfriend Randy and I notice a boy following me and as curious as I was I ignored it and continued walking. I found my girlfriend and approaching me was my little stalker, I asked “why where you following me” he stated he was friends with Randy, I questioned the matter then me and him where introduced. My stalkers name was Cody, and we immediately sensed something in each other. We talked to discover that we had allot in common such as, favorite cartoon, choice in music, even favorite food, having so much in common we decided to hang out the rest of the night, me, him and my girlfriend. My new friend and I went outside to play at the booths that here set up, we played all kinds of games but we had only one favorite and that was the dunk, we had the chance to dunk our principal into a huge tank of water, many failed but we where the victors.
The night was growing and the party with it, but it was not over yet, we had to try the haunted house. My girlfriend Randy took off with her other friends, but Cody wanted to hang out with me, I was very pleased at the fact that we had such a bond going on. Cody and I went over to the haunted house, the halls of this attraction where desolate to desolate for us, we knew something was going to pop out and startle us to death; our adrenaline was pulsating, and our hearts beating! It was intense, we enjoyed ourselves allot. Cody and I reached the end of the haunted house; we were now headed back to the booths for some pictures. Cody, Randy and I took pictures and went trick or treating which was set up in classrooms around the school. We were very hasty as we screamed the childish lyric “trick or treat, smell my feet, give me something good to eat”, I gained more than candy during this journey, I gained dehydration.
Finally, we were finished, we had vast quantities of candy and we had allot of fun. Cody, Randy and I went and said our farewells to the teachers and headed to the pickup area in front of the school. Cody and I separated for a moment and during this short period I experienced my first kiss with Randy, it was very pleasant, her mother arrived seconds later and she was gone. I sat down on a bench by myself waiting for my mother to come and pick me up and rushing to me out of the school doors comes Cody with an aroused look in his eye, he took a deep breath and said “would you like to spend the night at my house” I smiled and gladly went with him. Cody and I have spent every day with each other sense the party while our bond strengthened with every second of every day. Meeting Cody was and always will be both the most memorable and best day of my entire life, I’m glad he is my friend.
oh and i did indent it just wont show it for some reason anyway thank you allotIt was the day I crossed paths with the most important person in my life, my best friend. It was four years ago on a cold evening in October, just a day before hallows eve one of my most cherished holidays. There was a party being held at my school for the early celebration of Halloween, I was so excited and completely unaware of the friend that awaited my presence. I walked outside and awaited my transportation, I could not take the excitement it was eating me alive. I’m on my way to the hallow edifice to see what surprises lurk within. Before I could no longer suffer the endless anticipation, we arrived at the party, it was everything I thought it would be, the lights where darkened, the halls where full of sinister surprises, the party favors where delicious and the night was young.
Now, I find myself aimlessly walking around the crowd looking for my girlfriend Randy and I notice a boy following me and as curious as I was I ignored it and continued walking. I found my girlfriend and approaching me was my little stalker, I asked “why where you following me” he stated he was friends with Randy, I questioned the matter then me and him where introduced. My stalkers name was Cody, and we immediately sensed something in each other. We talked to discover that we had allot in common such as, favorite cartoon, choice in music, even favorite food, having so much in common we decided to hang out the rest of the night, me, him and my girlfriend. My new friend and I went outside to play at the booths that here set up, we played all kinds of games but we had only one favorite and that was the dunk, we had the chance to dunk our principal into a huge tank of water, many failed but we where the victors.
The night was growing and the party with it, but it was not over yet, we had to try the haunted house. My girlfriend Randy took off with her other friends, but Cody wanted to hang out with me, I was very pleased at the fact that we had such a bond going on. Cody and I went over to the haunted house, the halls of this attraction where desolate to desolate for us, we knew something was going to pop out and startle us to death; our adrenaline was pulsating, and our hearts beating! It was intense, we enjoyed ourselves allot. Cody and I reached the end of the haunted house; we were now headed back to the booths for some pictures. Cody, Randy and I took pictures and went trick or treating which was set up in classrooms around the school. We were very hasty as we screamed the childish lyric “trick or treat, smell my feet, give me something good to eat”, I gained more than candy during this journey, I gained dehydration.
Finally, we were finished, we had vast quantities of candy and we had allot of fun. Cody, Randy and I went and said our farewells to the teachers and headed to the pickup area in front of the school. Cody and I separated for a moment and during this short period I experienced my first kiss with Randy, it was very pleasant, her mother arrived seconds later and she was gone. I sat down on a bench by myself waiting for my mother to come and pick me up and rushing to me out of the school doors comes Cody with an aroused look in his eye, he took a deep breath and said “would you like to spend the night at my house” I smiled and gladly went with him. Cody and I have spent every day with each other sense the party while our bond strengthened with every second of every day. Meeting Cody was and always will be both the most memorable and best day of my entire life, I’m glad he is my friend.