Will anyone please check my scholarship essay for me? Thanks!?

May Vang

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My name is Viangkaeo Lee. I’m applying for this scholarship because I want to get a superior education in the future. I personally believe I will do better in life with an education and will work hard to keep my grade point average of 4.0. In addition, I believe I am deserving of this award. With this award, I’ll be able to continue my studies, and become a surgical nurse. As a student in middle school, I continually push myself so I can grow as a person. Some of my goals are to continue to get good grades, graduate from high school and attend college. I want to go to my high school graduation ceremony and officially attend college with a major in the medical field. Ever since I can remember, I have always wanted to help people. My career goal is to become a nurse. I am empathetic, patient, flexible, and hardworking. By majoring in medical field, I feel I will be able to utilize my care-taking skills.
My family and I migrated from Thailand to the United States of America on November 3rd, 2004. I’ve to start my education at the age of eight, where it caused a challenge for me to catch up with others. Life in Thailand was a chaos for me and my family. We lived in a small bamboo house where harsh weather troubled us. Since we’ve to pay to go to school in Thailand, my father didn’t allow me and my younger sisters to attend school. Because of the expense of my older siblings’ education, my parents worked very hard to earn enough money to pay for their education. My parents’ work ethic and daily struggles continue to serve as an inspiration for me to strive for a relevant and meaningful education and profession.
Although I found myself in a new complex world, with a challenging language I had to learn from basic, I believe I can face the challenge of achieving my career with my other spoken language, Hmong. As well, I am a student who excels in my education. Because I’m a responsible person, I am a member of Rivera Middle School Library Club which I organize books in to its proper place and regulate the library to a more accurate and adequate accommodation part of the school campus. I’m also a member of Rivera Middle School Club Live with the provision of community services and volunteering. I joined Rivera Middle School Advance Math Class because I wanted to test and improve my mathematical skills. I’m also in association with Rivera Middle School Advance Science Society. Moreover, I participated in the MCSD 2011 Spelling Bee and enrolled in California Junior Scholarship Federation (CJSF) in which I take the effort of getting good grades quarterly. One of my greatest achievements is being a member of the 2009 G.R.E.A.T. Summer Program wherein I provided assistance to my community to help to prevent gang involvement. With this organization, I acted as a role model for my society and school to make it a better place. Throughout my life, I’ve worked as long and as hard as I possibly can to effect beneficial changes in both school and society.
My short-term career goal consists of successfully graduating college with my Bachelor of Science Degree. With this short-term goal I will also achieve my long-term goal of becoming a nurse. I want to hone my skills as a graduate of nursing school to help my community become a better health wise place. I’ve chosen nursing because this particular field will help me to develop my clinical skills, not only which, I’ll also be able to save lives, and shine through in my care-taking skills. I’ve encountered many difficulties in life; this is one of the reasons for my vigorous need to help care for others and save lives. My goals and life plans have always inspired me to do my best and I'll continue on pushing myself to excel.
I hope to continue my education toward college because I want to have a higher education and a good job in the future. Because of my parents’ low income and inferior education, they wouldn’t be able to support me financially. Receiving the scholarship will provide me with the peace of mind and security to manage my rent, utilities, transportation, and book expenses. The scholarship will allow me the time to focus on maintaining my 4.0 GPA, take up full load of classes while simultaneously preparing for my research and my thesis – my culminating experience. My parents’ legacy and experiences continue to motivate me to persist and to use my education to better the conditions within nursing. I trust the scholarship selection committee will provide me the support I need to continue my studies somewhere in the future.
 
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