What's your view on my poem?

[Johnnie Verichi]

Seeing upon the sky.
The feeling of a new.
Of Love felt beside.
Nothing, left untrue.

She wakes without a strain
To the hearing of a pause
Her feelings yet insane.
Lost without a cause.

Distance from his home
For the calling of his life.
Denied ever alone..
Neck*against the scythe.

A choice from mistakes.
Left alone disgraced.
Nothing left to take.
Only once to break.

You inject me with a Drug.
I break onto my knees.
It cannot be undone.
I burn of a disease.

He nails at his eyes
He is losing once to you.
I wear my face a lie.
Fu** you..

..Your going down too

 

[M. Scars]

Good, except for the last two lines. The imagery is good, though some of the lines may take a few reads to understand. It's certainly not bad. The last two lines, however, ruin the mood and sounds amateurish. It sounds better without the last two lines.