C
Cassidy
Guest
I want an honest opinion, no matter how brutal it may be. Here are just a few simple poems I've composed. Personally, I don't think I'm a good poet but I'd like to see what other people think:
I Once Had a Doll
I once had a doll
She had a pretty little face, perhaps the prettiest I had ever seen
She had beautiful clothing, yes indeed she did
Her skin was as ivory and smooth, oh how I longed to look like her
She also had pretty eyes, as green as a rich lady’s emerald
Yet something was wrong with my doll
Every night I would awake to weeping
Being only a mere child, I investigated, foolishly enough
I had seen my doll wiping her pretty face with her dainty hand
Blinded by curiosity, I had asked her what was wrong
She had looked at me, with her pretty green eyes, and then she grew still
At the time I hadn’t understood, so I merely shrugged my boney shoulders and lay my head back on my pillow
I once had a doll
After many years had gone by, I forgot about my pretty little doll
I was growing older, too old to play with dolls
Then one day, I was searching my closet for that pretty gown I had promised mother I would wear to her fancy dinner, and I found my doll
Her porcelain skin coated with dust and her once silky locks tangled
That is when I burst into tears for I realized that my pretty little doll was all alone this whole time
I threw her back into the closet, afraid my mother would hear my petty cries, I couldn’t risk being lectured yet again, oh no
I once had a doll
Many days have gone by since I have laid eyes on that pretty little doll
I moved from my mother’s house long ago
I have fallen in love
I have had a child
Indeed it has been a while
One rainy Sunday, on the walk back home from church, I saw my pretty little doll in the window of a store
I had gasped and grown still, my husband had asked me what had bothered me
I could only look at him and smile
and
Betwixt sun and moon
Craving for your love to come soon
Please come and rescue me my dear
Your affection is a gentle cure
Being the only one to redeem me
I’m dying can’t you see?
Roast my scorched heart in a pit filled with coal
Malevolence my soul
Even through all the malice
Lavish upon my salvation
Please
I’d rather you lie
Please
I won’t question your veracity anymore, believe me dear
All I want for you is to care for me
But it’s in the future, yet I can’t behold
Knowing it’s a fib
and finally,
Anguish slashes at souls
Moonlight like a soft lull
Hoping for it not to be real
Hearts may never heal
Like a silent scream
Like a sudden dream
Don’t cry
Don’t try
Evanesce away
Not getting any better today
Longing to lie
Wishing to die
Enveloped in darkness
Feeling heartless
Feelings of woe
Creeping so low
Fragile hearts shatter
Yet it won’t matter
For I’m the one bleeding
You’re the one who is leading
My life in to a dark hole
I Once Had a Doll
I once had a doll
She had a pretty little face, perhaps the prettiest I had ever seen
She had beautiful clothing, yes indeed she did
Her skin was as ivory and smooth, oh how I longed to look like her
She also had pretty eyes, as green as a rich lady’s emerald
Yet something was wrong with my doll
Every night I would awake to weeping
Being only a mere child, I investigated, foolishly enough
I had seen my doll wiping her pretty face with her dainty hand
Blinded by curiosity, I had asked her what was wrong
She had looked at me, with her pretty green eyes, and then she grew still
At the time I hadn’t understood, so I merely shrugged my boney shoulders and lay my head back on my pillow
I once had a doll
After many years had gone by, I forgot about my pretty little doll
I was growing older, too old to play with dolls
Then one day, I was searching my closet for that pretty gown I had promised mother I would wear to her fancy dinner, and I found my doll
Her porcelain skin coated with dust and her once silky locks tangled
That is when I burst into tears for I realized that my pretty little doll was all alone this whole time
I threw her back into the closet, afraid my mother would hear my petty cries, I couldn’t risk being lectured yet again, oh no
I once had a doll
Many days have gone by since I have laid eyes on that pretty little doll
I moved from my mother’s house long ago
I have fallen in love
I have had a child
Indeed it has been a while
One rainy Sunday, on the walk back home from church, I saw my pretty little doll in the window of a store
I had gasped and grown still, my husband had asked me what had bothered me
I could only look at him and smile
and
Betwixt sun and moon
Craving for your love to come soon
Please come and rescue me my dear
Your affection is a gentle cure
Being the only one to redeem me
I’m dying can’t you see?
Roast my scorched heart in a pit filled with coal
Malevolence my soul
Even through all the malice
Lavish upon my salvation
Please
I’d rather you lie
Please
I won’t question your veracity anymore, believe me dear
All I want for you is to care for me
But it’s in the future, yet I can’t behold
Knowing it’s a fib
and finally,
Anguish slashes at souls
Moonlight like a soft lull
Hoping for it not to be real
Hearts may never heal
Like a silent scream
Like a sudden dream
Don’t cry
Don’t try
Evanesce away
Not getting any better today
Longing to lie
Wishing to die
Enveloped in darkness
Feeling heartless
Feelings of woe
Creeping so low
Fragile hearts shatter
Yet it won’t matter
For I’m the one bleeding
You’re the one who is leading
My life in to a dark hole