Don't think this as something that needs to be praised or criticized but try to see if the lines speak to you in any way. Does it remind you of something or someone. If not, explain in detail why not.
"Underneath the grounds that are not elusive
You hear echoes carried in morbid winds
The unconscious without a recall
You hear them murmur throughout the Universe
Time trapped inside a photograph
Memories recorded on a captured still
But the photographic quality can change the memories
There is something whispering flair in your ears
You turn to look but all you find is the shadow of a mare
Distinctive and unique
A lonely Swan swims back to the pond
Forbearing its own misery"
"Underneath the grounds that are not elusive
You hear echoes carried in morbid winds
The unconscious without a recall
You hear them murmur throughout the Universe
Time trapped inside a photograph
Memories recorded on a captured still
But the photographic quality can change the memories
There is something whispering flair in your ears
You turn to look but all you find is the shadow of a mare
Distinctive and unique
A lonely Swan swims back to the pond
Forbearing its own misery"