WanderingTraveler
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"Evolution"
She looked at me
I looked at her
Understanding
She could be me
I coud be her
Turns tangling
I was her, not
Was she me, by
Chance Happening?
Rats and humans
Together grow,
To Time's chosing
I lay to rot
She lives in rot
All revolving
Suns rise, circles
Vantage closing
She could be me
I could be her
Turns tangling
I am her not,
I she me, by
Slightest Chosing.
I need to know what's confusing about it.
thanks, man. It's one of the worst I've written, and I'm trying to save it because I like its flow.
She looked at me
I looked at her
Understanding
She could be me
I coud be her
Turns tangling
I was her, not
Was she me, by
Chance Happening?
Rats and humans
Together grow,
To Time's chosing
I lay to rot
She lives in rot
All revolving
Suns rise, circles
Vantage closing
She could be me
I could be her
Turns tangling
I am her not,
I she me, by
Slightest Chosing.
I need to know what's confusing about it.
thanks, man. It's one of the worst I've written, and I'm trying to save it because I like its flow.