What do you think of this poem?

dnylakbr

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I'm 16 and I wrote this recently it's still kind of just a draft. I want really honest opinons please, and some feedback if you'd like =]

Still no title

When he has ideas, I have work
When they have ideas, we have work
If it doesn't come with a letter grade, he doesn't care
If it doesn't make them money, they don't care
If it's convenient for him, feelings don't matter
If it's convenient for them, feelings don't matter
We can't rebel- we've been brainwashed to conform
 
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