I wrote it using magnetic poetry, and I really liked it, but I wanted to make sure I wasn't crazy. 
Tell me what you think... but more than that, please give me feedback!
We surround the translucent universe,
Sailing on.
Will voices worry those who remember?
Eternity in a lifetime.
Young hope, poison to the soul.
That was yesterday.
You seep through my voice,
One more word, one more worry.
With each new breath, I know.
The end isn't so far.
Tell me what you think... but more than that, please give me feedback!
We surround the translucent universe,
Sailing on.
Will voices worry those who remember?
Eternity in a lifetime.
Young hope, poison to the soul.
That was yesterday.
You seep through my voice,
One more word, one more worry.
With each new breath, I know.
The end isn't so far.