what do you think of this paragrapgh?

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“your not going anywhere.” he promised, completely confident. I didn't let myself look at him, even though the thought it was intriguing. He was just so perfect.
“I can leave whenever I want.” I crossed my arms over my chest and kept looking out the window. I could feel him staring at me and I was positive I was going to loose this battle. “Humph” I grunted.
Just like that he was in front of me, one arm around my waist, the other forcing my chin up to look at him.
“No, I have something to show you.”

what do you think of it. i edited it a few times. and i did write it.
thanks!
 
Your grammar isn't very good, but the writing is okay. Use you're instead of your in the beginning, and it's lose instead of loose the battle.
 
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