Would this blurb make you want to read my book?....
With the Black Portal re-opened and plans in place to wipe out all followers of the Brotherhood of Blood, the future for the vampires of the Brotherhood looks bleak.
Kasbian, the leader of the vampire slayers, plans to lead his army to victory and has set events in motion that could lead to the extinction of all life in the vampire empire.
Ruler of the Brotherhood of Blood, Queen Desdemona, vows not let the slayers defeat her people and sets her followers a mission to recruit only the mightiest candidates to the Brotherhood to assist them in their fight.
One follower in particular that Queen Desdemona has high hopes for is Dante Guiseppe. Desdemona created him herself and taught him everything that he knows so her expectations of him are high, but will Dante be able to live up to Queen Desdemona's expectations or will he let a romance with one of his victims, Darcie Hart jeopardise victory for the Brotherhood?
One particular bit that i'm not happy with is.... One follower in particular that Queen Desdemona has high hopes for is Dante Guiseppe.... Opinions on how to improve this would be appreciated
I just want opinions on the blurb please, no complaints about it being based on vampires
Would it make you want to pick the book up and read it or would you put it back on the shelf?
Opinions would be appreciated
Also, name suggestions for the portal would be appreciated as I dont really like 'Black Portal'.
Thank You
With the Black Portal re-opened and plans in place to wipe out all followers of the Brotherhood of Blood, the future for the vampires of the Brotherhood looks bleak.
Kasbian, the leader of the vampire slayers, plans to lead his army to victory and has set events in motion that could lead to the extinction of all life in the vampire empire.
Ruler of the Brotherhood of Blood, Queen Desdemona, vows not let the slayers defeat her people and sets her followers a mission to recruit only the mightiest candidates to the Brotherhood to assist them in their fight.
One follower in particular that Queen Desdemona has high hopes for is Dante Guiseppe. Desdemona created him herself and taught him everything that he knows so her expectations of him are high, but will Dante be able to live up to Queen Desdemona's expectations or will he let a romance with one of his victims, Darcie Hart jeopardise victory for the Brotherhood?
One particular bit that i'm not happy with is.... One follower in particular that Queen Desdemona has high hopes for is Dante Guiseppe.... Opinions on how to improve this would be appreciated
I just want opinions on the blurb please, no complaints about it being based on vampires
Would it make you want to pick the book up and read it or would you put it back on the shelf?
Opinions would be appreciated
Also, name suggestions for the portal would be appreciated as I dont really like 'Black Portal'.
Thank You