"Stop!!" yelled Ostara in terror. All the tribes were after her. She was an outsider. She didn't belong here with the others.
Ostara was born away from the tribes and left by her mother and father to be raised with the wolves. Her mother passed away after she was born and her father decided he could not handle a child. Now she is an outsider. No one knows her name, her parents, or where she comes from. She shouldn't be with tribes. But she was. She had to get food somehow!
"STEALER! STEALER! STEALER!" You could hear the tribes shouting as they chased after Ostara with their torches and bows. Ostara was getting weaker and weaker by the second. She hadn't eaten in days. She was in a terrible state. As she was running, she realized she wasn't gonna get away, so she fell to the ground in agony. She let out a loud howl as she called for her wolf brothers to save her. She realized it was too late when she felt a pair of strong hands pick her up and take her away. She had no idea where she was when she heard a voice. "You could've died out there! What were you thinking to steal food?!". Ostara opened her eyes to see a beautiful face in front of her. It was a boy. He had seductive brown eyes that almost made her faint. He had beatiful tan skin. He had dark brown hair that glimmered in the sun. It seemed to her like he had no flaws.
"I...I...I was hungry." Ostara answered quickly.
"That doesn't mean to steal food! They would have killed you if it wasn't for me!" the boy shouted back in anger.
"Sorry, I...I'm sorry."
"It's okay. We can still be friends. My name is Ateyo. I'm an outsider also. What's your name?"
"Umm...I'm Ostara."
"Great to meet you Ostara! You are beautiful by the way." Ateyo kissed her hand.Ostara was dark toned with blue eyes and dark Auburn hair. She had a very beautiful face.
"How did you get me, Ateyo?" Ostara asked in a concerned voice.
"The tribes know to stay away from me. I'm not as good of a kid as I may seem." Ateyo answered, looking down as if he felt ashamed.
"What did you do? Did you kill someone?"
"I don't want to talk about it." Ateyo got up and walked away. He sat on a log and buries his face in his knees.
Is it good? What should I change?
Ostara was born away from the tribes and left by her mother and father to be raised with the wolves. Her mother passed away after she was born and her father decided he could not handle a child. Now she is an outsider. No one knows her name, her parents, or where she comes from. She shouldn't be with tribes. But she was. She had to get food somehow!
"STEALER! STEALER! STEALER!" You could hear the tribes shouting as they chased after Ostara with their torches and bows. Ostara was getting weaker and weaker by the second. She hadn't eaten in days. She was in a terrible state. As she was running, she realized she wasn't gonna get away, so she fell to the ground in agony. She let out a loud howl as she called for her wolf brothers to save her. She realized it was too late when she felt a pair of strong hands pick her up and take her away. She had no idea where she was when she heard a voice. "You could've died out there! What were you thinking to steal food?!". Ostara opened her eyes to see a beautiful face in front of her. It was a boy. He had seductive brown eyes that almost made her faint. He had beatiful tan skin. He had dark brown hair that glimmered in the sun. It seemed to her like he had no flaws.
"I...I...I was hungry." Ostara answered quickly.
"That doesn't mean to steal food! They would have killed you if it wasn't for me!" the boy shouted back in anger.
"Sorry, I...I'm sorry."
"It's okay. We can still be friends. My name is Ateyo. I'm an outsider also. What's your name?"
"Umm...I'm Ostara."
"Great to meet you Ostara! You are beautiful by the way." Ateyo kissed her hand.Ostara was dark toned with blue eyes and dark Auburn hair. She had a very beautiful face.
"How did you get me, Ateyo?" Ostara asked in a concerned voice.
"The tribes know to stay away from me. I'm not as good of a kid as I may seem." Ateyo answered, looking down as if he felt ashamed.
"What did you do? Did you kill someone?"
"I don't want to talk about it." Ateyo got up and walked away. He sat on a log and buries his face in his knees.
Is it good? What should I change?