What do you think of the blurb of my book?

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Many people say the world is going to end in a big explosion due to global warming, but has anyone ever stop and thought about the world ending because of limited resources or brutal law suggestions, which can bring down the whole world? - No? Well let’s take a travel into the future - to the year 3080 exactly.
This is the year the world will end in tragedy, this year will be remembered for eternity, will be the talk of history (if there is anything left to tell the tale.) Ever hear people talk about in the future things are meant to progress? Like flying cars? - And everything high tech? Well it isn’t, things will go back; there will be no cars, no aeroplanes, no TV. Everything will be gone. Think you could live in a world that is so plain? Could survive the terror? Let’s take a look shall we?

Would it make you read it?
Also what do you think of the title - Way Away? - Sorry the blurb was suppose to be split into paragraphs.
 
It doesn't make much sense. What does 'brutal law suggestions' mean? I wouldn't worry about writing the blurb anyway, concentrate on writing the story first. If you intend to submit it for publishing you will have to write a synopsis but that is very different to a blurb.
 
Okay. Let's break this story apart for a second.
1)I'd change "the world is going to end" to "the world will end".
2)The intro sentence isn't very captivating. I'd look for ways to make it more interesting, because as it stands right now, it's pretty dull and dry.
3)You don't need to say "-No?" a simple "No?" by itself without the hyphen is fine.
4) If this is a ficitonal piece I wouldn't suggest writing it in second person like you're doing.
Good luck!
 
Okay. Let's break this story apart for a second.
1)I'd change "the world is going to end" to "the world will end".
2)The intro sentence isn't very captivating. I'd look for ways to make it more interesting, because as it stands right now, it's pretty dull and dry.
3)You don't need to say "-No?" a simple "No?" by itself without the hyphen is fine.
4) If this is a ficitonal piece I wouldn't suggest writing it in second person like you're doing.
Good luck!
 
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