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Kayla Brooke
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Hi well I just joined today on Fanfiction but I wrote a chapter of my first fanfiction story im gonna post it here. Tell me what I should change to make it sound good and tell me what you think of it.~Kayla
The Suprise!
Hello this is my first story ever! I do not own the Twilight Saga I wish I did but I dont!
Chapter1- Wedding Night
(Bella POV)
A week ago me Alice, and Roselie went shopping for lingre at Victoria's Secrets for the wedding night. I ended up getting my lingre in blue in red. I was in the bathroom getting changed into my blue lingre and Edward was in the bedroom acting weird and he said he had a suprise for me. When I walked out of the bathroom my jaw was hanging open, there was a wonderful smell of lavender coming from the candles that were on surrounding the whole room and the bed, romantic music was playing, beautiful pink, white, and rose petals were scattered all over the room. Then there was Edward turned around not looking at me but he was in hawaiian boxers. After a minute I was just standing there without my mouth opend. Edward turned around with his jaw was hanging open because of me I guess he took this in suprising. He was right next to me in a second with his arms around my waist
"Love you look very sexy", Edward wispered in my ear.
Then within a minute we were on his bed about to do it, my heart racing really fast, Edward chuckled at this.
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6:00 in the morning the day after the wedding ( Bella POV)
I was awoken by Alice yelling. I looked over to seeing Edward staring at me, he smiled my favorite smile.
"Goodmorning Sleeping Beauty",said Edward.
" Goodmorning", I said giving him a kiss on the lips.
"Dont you think last night was amazing?", asked Edward.
"Yes", I said having a flashback of last night.
"Why is Alice yelling?", I asked.
" She is mad at Emment for sitting on her laptop, and also he burnt her clothes", said Edward.
"Oh!", I said with my eyes bulging and my jaw hanging open.
" Bella I will be back in a week or three me and Carlise, Emment, and Jasper have to go hunting and go see Tanya and the others up in Alaska, you know it would be a girls weeks until we come back and dont forget I love you; I want you to have my heart and my soul until I come back", said Edward wearing a sad face.
"Okay, but I dont like it when you leave me it would be like it was when you left me for a while and I detest it so much and yea I love you two", I said in a sad voice.
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3 weeks Later ( Bella POV)
I woke up at 6:00 am as usual and I knew Edward wasnt back yet. I didnt feel good today I rushed into the bathroom to throw up in the toilet. I heard a knock at the door it was Esme and Alice.
" Are you ok sweetie?", asked Esme.
" Yeah I think so", I said.
" Good news for us the Boys will be back Sunday and I know today is Monday but they have a suprise for all of us I heard the conversation in my vision but I wish I knew what the suprise was!", said Alice with her eyes looking all sad and excited.
For the rest of the week I kept throwing up in the morning.
On Friday Esme Talked me into getting a pregnancy test.
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How did you think of my story and I am trying my best to write a good story yes there will be a new chapter because of the cliffhanger. Please review and give me some ideas for the future chapters I might write another one today! Also thankyou for reading!
The Suprise!
Hello this is my first story ever! I do not own the Twilight Saga I wish I did but I dont!
Chapter1- Wedding Night
(Bella POV)
A week ago me Alice, and Roselie went shopping for lingre at Victoria's Secrets for the wedding night. I ended up getting my lingre in blue in red. I was in the bathroom getting changed into my blue lingre and Edward was in the bedroom acting weird and he said he had a suprise for me. When I walked out of the bathroom my jaw was hanging open, there was a wonderful smell of lavender coming from the candles that were on surrounding the whole room and the bed, romantic music was playing, beautiful pink, white, and rose petals were scattered all over the room. Then there was Edward turned around not looking at me but he was in hawaiian boxers. After a minute I was just standing there without my mouth opend. Edward turned around with his jaw was hanging open because of me I guess he took this in suprising. He was right next to me in a second with his arms around my waist
"Love you look very sexy", Edward wispered in my ear.
Then within a minute we were on his bed about to do it, my heart racing really fast, Edward chuckled at this.
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6:00 in the morning the day after the wedding ( Bella POV)
I was awoken by Alice yelling. I looked over to seeing Edward staring at me, he smiled my favorite smile.
"Goodmorning Sleeping Beauty",said Edward.
" Goodmorning", I said giving him a kiss on the lips.
"Dont you think last night was amazing?", asked Edward.
"Yes", I said having a flashback of last night.
"Why is Alice yelling?", I asked.
" She is mad at Emment for sitting on her laptop, and also he burnt her clothes", said Edward.
"Oh!", I said with my eyes bulging and my jaw hanging open.
" Bella I will be back in a week or three me and Carlise, Emment, and Jasper have to go hunting and go see Tanya and the others up in Alaska, you know it would be a girls weeks until we come back and dont forget I love you; I want you to have my heart and my soul until I come back", said Edward wearing a sad face.
"Okay, but I dont like it when you leave me it would be like it was when you left me for a while and I detest it so much and yea I love you two", I said in a sad voice.
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3 weeks Later ( Bella POV)
I woke up at 6:00 am as usual and I knew Edward wasnt back yet. I didnt feel good today I rushed into the bathroom to throw up in the toilet. I heard a knock at the door it was Esme and Alice.
" Are you ok sweetie?", asked Esme.
" Yeah I think so", I said.
" Good news for us the Boys will be back Sunday and I know today is Monday but they have a suprise for all of us I heard the conversation in my vision but I wish I knew what the suprise was!", said Alice with her eyes looking all sad and excited.
For the rest of the week I kept throwing up in the morning.
On Friday Esme Talked me into getting a pregnancy test.
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How did you think of my story and I am trying my best to write a good story yes there will be a new chapter because of the cliffhanger. Please review and give me some ideas for the future chapters I might write another one today! Also thankyou for reading!