What do you think of my story? (preteen author)?

Hayley

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I'm only 11 but I have been writing since I was small and tall. -.-

I hope you like it. Any advice would be great, thank you.

“Lucy, I hate you.”

The door banged shut, a bunch of raven black hair dissapearing behind it.

How nice.

“LUCY!”

“LUCY!” I mimicked rolling my eyes.

“Did you steal my perfume?”

“No, Lacey, I did not steal your perfume.”

“But it’s gone and I know you took it! Now give it back!”

“No?” I said.

Another door slammed further down the hall, an exasperated voice following it’s absence.

I stood there a few minutes, the vibrant colours of my room seeming to get blurrier every second I stood there, staring.

Wet, hot tears sprung out of nowhere and trickled down my cheeks flowing into my mouth.

I closed my eyes.

I didn’t matter. Nothing mattered. Nobody loved me. My life was pointless.

Dancer walked into the room, four legs sagging with tiredness.

He leapt onto my bed, completely ignoring me.

Typical cat behaviour, I told myself, nothing to worry about.

“LUCY! Can you come down here for a minute, please?”

“Okay, no need to yell!” I screamed slamming my door angrily and leaping onto my bed, burying my face in a pillow.
WARNING: You are reading an unfinished story. Over. =)
 
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