What do you think of my short poetry?

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Dan W

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Trapped in my own misguided realities
Never mind the formalities
This hollow soul has turned to glass and begun to shatter
Make me believe that we still matter
Teach me what it's like to to love and to care
Go on and do it if you dare
Pull me out, and hold me near
Make it count, id love you dear
This fire is spreading with a gust
Ashes to ashes, dust to dust
Yeah i know, i just find it more challenging
 
Ah so nice. I adore the last line. I honestly feel it speaks to the cynic in me, it's about someone looking for another to teach them how to love since they've been wronged before? Marvelous.

Check out my poem?
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20110603001655AAQRYOW
 
really....Good! i really like how it gets darker and goes into "make it count..." that part brings it up with attitude and back to dark n cool way to end it. i imagined every word. good job.
 
really....Good! i really like how it gets darker and goes into "make it count..." that part brings it up with attitude and back to dark n cool way to end it. i imagined every word. good job.
 
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