What do you think of my short poem?

J

just dreaming

New member
(Quiet) Dance

shhh
can you hear the fireflies
tiptoeing
through the windbrushed night

iridescent wings
erupt
into a million
ruby, sea-green tassels
burning the blueblack sky










What do you think it means?
Any suggestions for improvement / things you would change?
 
drop S1 and keep this:

iridescent wings erupt
into a million sea-green tassels
burning the blue-black sky

if you need a title call it Firefly
 
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