what do you think of my sad poem?

[epicfail]

---------Dispair---------


Why must I feel so cold everyday

Why must I have thies feelings today

I feel hollow, and gloomy, and lonly all day.

So why should I live when life seems so hopless I say.

Why won't someone just save me someday.


I was feeling gloomy today so I thought I might share one of my poems
I could use some Constructive criticism if you have any.

 

[crazi]

*sniff*

you should carry on with it! From worse to worse....

 

[Susan S]

I think that is very good. Writing is hard. Take care of yourself.