What do you think of my poetry?

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archerykid

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What do you think of my poetry?
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Bottle of Wine--

Open a bottle of wine
Release the steam
Release the pressure
Release all the sorrows bottled up through all the years

Let it breathe
Let it vent
I am a bottle of wine

Open me.

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Attempted Perfection--

I tried to be perfect
I tried to be honest
I tried to be everything

All you ever wanted
All you ever needed
All of that, I was

Back when you used to love me
Back when you used to care
Back when I was dumb enough to believe that you would always be there

That was my mistake
That was my attempted perfection

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Hahaha, I know it may sound like it.... But I am NOT depressed. Lol! I just like this type of poetry.
Thanks Crimzon!!!! Ya I like the sound of your idea.... Youre a big help! :) Nice to hear positive feedback for a change. Lol!
Oh and yes I do like repetition. My poetry usually doesnt have too much structure or rhyming. I dont write it to be a pro or get it published. Just for fun and as an outlet.
Thanks again!!!!!
 
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