What do you think of my poetry/ potential lyrics?
I know it's something I should be satisfied with and it shouldn't matter what strangers think but.. I'm not really too confident in my poetry. Anyways here it goes:
when the world begins to shake/
I am lulled back to sleep/
where shadows haunt my dreams/
and my gods begin to weep/
my eyes are tiny holes/
in the depths of stormy seas/
the skies are turning red
.. that's all I got so far. Honesty/ constructive criticism is appreciated. This isn't exactly my best work so please be honest I can take it..
I know it's something I should be satisfied with and it shouldn't matter what strangers think but.. I'm not really too confident in my poetry. Anyways here it goes:
when the world begins to shake/
I am lulled back to sleep/
where shadows haunt my dreams/
and my gods begin to weep/
my eyes are tiny holes/
in the depths of stormy seas/
the skies are turning red
.. that's all I got so far. Honesty/ constructive criticism is appreciated. This isn't exactly my best work so please be honest I can take it..