So I have this big assignment where i wright a bunch of poetry and turn it in. It's worth alot of points. I want to bring my grade up to a B. Can you give me some improvements I could do. And give me ideas for the others i have to make. It's due on the 16th.
Acrostic Poem
Simese
Iinterestingly curious
Mice are his favorite toy
On top of things
Noticeing everything going on
ok that was probely the worst one i have
Clinquain
The Tredmill
The consistant running
that just keeps going and going
it seems to be never ending
then you look down
You notice the bladck plastic moveing under you feet
and give it a frown......
You know all that running was for nothing
all the energy you gave
could have been saved for another day
You havn't gone anywhere anyway
Concrete poem
You hear the waves of the ocean, the wet swishing sound
Your laying on a towl in the sand
The sun is right where you are found
the sun sets earlyer than planned
you start to feel cold
and your towl, you start to fold
you start to walk along the shore
you feel the sand between you toes
you wish you could stay longer, but it is to cold, that is for sure
you start to feel the wind blow
as you come close to your car
you start to see the stars
You enter the car, and you start to feel warm
then you drive off, into the potential storm.
Diamante Poem
They always say, a diamond is a girls best freind
Ecsepecialy a marrige ring
it's always stylish, and the latest trend
such happyness the diamond will bring
it can also bring sadness
ecsepecialy, when a divorce happens
everytime you look at it, you'll be heartbrocken
You'll think of the first time you saw it and the words spoken
off to the pawn shop, where you will forget it
then someone els will buy it
then the cycle starts all over
mabe this one, will last forever
Free verse/organic
Christanity, the unseperative bond
fill you sould and makes you spirtual
makes you go to other christians, and correspond
Jesus, is you constant fuel
from sins, you shall repent
Any future sins, you will prevent
Jesus is your refuge
the wisdom from the bible is huge
constant love, wisdom, and refuge
So yea, I have ALOT to go still.... I work on it a little every day, but now i need to rush. I need another fee verse, Haiku, cinquain, sonnet, traditional. So if you could give me some ideas, that would be great.
Acrostic Poem
Simese
Iinterestingly curious
Mice are his favorite toy
On top of things
Noticeing everything going on
ok that was probely the worst one i have
Clinquain
The Tredmill
The consistant running
that just keeps going and going
it seems to be never ending
then you look down
You notice the bladck plastic moveing under you feet
and give it a frown......
You know all that running was for nothing
all the energy you gave
could have been saved for another day
You havn't gone anywhere anyway
Concrete poem
You hear the waves of the ocean, the wet swishing sound
Your laying on a towl in the sand
The sun is right where you are found
the sun sets earlyer than planned
you start to feel cold
and your towl, you start to fold
you start to walk along the shore
you feel the sand between you toes
you wish you could stay longer, but it is to cold, that is for sure
you start to feel the wind blow
as you come close to your car
you start to see the stars
You enter the car, and you start to feel warm
then you drive off, into the potential storm.
Diamante Poem
They always say, a diamond is a girls best freind
Ecsepecialy a marrige ring
it's always stylish, and the latest trend
such happyness the diamond will bring
it can also bring sadness
ecsepecialy, when a divorce happens
everytime you look at it, you'll be heartbrocken
You'll think of the first time you saw it and the words spoken
off to the pawn shop, where you will forget it
then someone els will buy it
then the cycle starts all over
mabe this one, will last forever
Free verse/organic
Christanity, the unseperative bond
fill you sould and makes you spirtual
makes you go to other christians, and correspond
Jesus, is you constant fuel
from sins, you shall repent
Any future sins, you will prevent
Jesus is your refuge
the wisdom from the bible is huge
constant love, wisdom, and refuge
So yea, I have ALOT to go still.... I work on it a little every day, but now i need to rush. I need another fee verse, Haiku, cinquain, sonnet, traditional. So if you could give me some ideas, that would be great.