What do you think of my poem?

M

Madison

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What do you think? What can I improve? Btw I'm 15

The skys turn a deep gray,
And the leaves fall between blades of grass,
Waiting to be crushed
Into the hard, cold ground.

Rain drops drip
And leaves decay
Drowning in the puddles,
On the hard, cold ground.

Wind blows passionately,
And leaves are thrown,
Pushed nonchalantly off a cliff,
To the hard, cold ground.

Snow trickles down,
And leaves are suffocated,
Left with no air,
To gasp for breath and die on the hard, cold ground.
 
Heeey I like it!!! I think if you change the word passionately into a more simple word it'd be better. and btw the word "nonchalantly". I love your poem i think using simple words like the words u used on the other parts would make it brilliant!
 
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