What do you think of my poem?

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Voodoo Child

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I'll die alone
For it's in my bones
However hard I try
I'll forever be a lie
Loving someone isn't easy
Getting close makes me uneasy
I lack the strength
it takes at length
I offer you
A rose blue
Like my heart
Now I depart

your thoughts?
you are right and I think I've fixed that hows this...

I'll die alone
For it's in my bones
However hard I try
I forever be a lie
Loving someone isn't easy
Getting close makes me uneasy
I lack the strength
It takes at length
I offer you a rose
Hoping that is shows
The feeling in my heart
Now I must depart
 
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