What do you think of my poem?

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Maggie Renee

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Please be completely honest =]

there's a fine line between what's disappointing and what's distructive
you seemed to have leaped over that line with pride gleaming in your eyes
//we have hope//
sooner or later we don't see that despicable pride, for your eyes have been blinded by the trickery of Venus
your new found love is our distress
//but we have hope//
your autonomy slides as she takes a ride on this power play
confusion and comfort fuse and emit catastrophe
//still we have hope//
but when you look at us, through us, not in our direction at all, our hope diffuses
our minds can not fathom why you continue to seclude yourself
yet we cling to whatever hope remains
we search for a simple reasoning in this complex altercation
still, all we receive is the honest truth
you're treading in deep waters
so now in the most difficult conditions
//we must have hope//

p.s. i'm using my friend's Y!answers profile, so don't send her emails and stuff about this. Just leave your responses. thanks =]
 
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