What do you think of my poem?

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Title: The Refugees

Fleeing the country and running away,
Embarking on a journey to liberation.
Dying to escape the infernal persecution,
Praying for a miracle to happen.
Treading through the field of desolation,
Climbing over the mountains that buried the past.
Sailing to the other side of the ocean,
Seeking for a safe shelter that will last.
by the way do i need a space between the two stanzas? (between first four phrases and last four phrases)

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Wow I actually really like this. It has a good balance of simplicity and strong word choice. It makes you think, yet is not difficult to understand. Very good!


Oh, a space between the stanza's would be nice, it would give more conviction to "praying for a miracle to happen." It would make it a stronger statement.
 
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