what do you think of my poem?

B.A.R.

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should i send this to my girlfriend? what would you change? (situation= i'm going back to iraq after mid tour leave)

Four more months i'll be in the desert
i've packed my boots and dressed my part
i do my job and enjoy my time but it's you i'll remember,
when on patrol, when on guard, and every moment i'm away i'll remember my time with you
they say the devil had his hands in making the place i'm heading to
and by taking me away from you i believe it.
all i ask is you remember me while i'm away
because i'm coming back and will see you again
know i'm not a poet i just want to make my girl happy b4 i leave
 
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