I wrote this poem when my great uncle died. Tell me what you think. I gave this poem to my great aunt and a bunch of family members. They all think it is great but there family so i want your feedback so i know that not just my family likes it! I think i got some of my writing skills from either school or the fact that my Great Uncle Art. His full name is Marion Art Ellis. I don't know if you guys have heard of him or not but i believe he writes biography's and other stuff so if you have heard of him please tell me! Thanks Hope you guys like my poem and please give me some feedback!
Now That Hes Gone
06-16-09
His in a better place now
He's with the lord in heaven
He's got the key to the gates of heaven
Sitting with the lord
Now that he's gone
All his pain is gone
All his worries are in Gods hand
He's a member of the place everyone has imagined
A place like none other
Everyday he will spend his time walking down the golden path
He will be with the lord
The lord loves him and he knows it
He will walk down the golden path everyday
With no worries, no pain
He will watch over his family
That he loves with all his heart
His family will miss him dearly
Now that he's gone
He is in the great world above
The place everyone has imagined all the days of their life
He's with the lord
The one above all things
Now that he's gone
He's an angel in the house of the lord everyday
Sitting with the lord
He's got the key to the gates of heaven
He's in a better place now
He's with the lord in the great place above
Now that he's gone
All his pain is gone
All his worries are in Gods hand
He's a member or the place like none other
He will walk down the golden path everyday
With no worries, no pain
In Memory of Jack Champion
06/25/44-06/16/09
By the way my Great Uncle Jack he died on his mothers birthday and a week before his birthday and he would have been 60 on 06-25-09 he died early but we know hes in a better place now
Now That Hes Gone
06-16-09
His in a better place now
He's with the lord in heaven
He's got the key to the gates of heaven
Sitting with the lord
Now that he's gone
All his pain is gone
All his worries are in Gods hand
He's a member of the place everyone has imagined
A place like none other
Everyday he will spend his time walking down the golden path
He will be with the lord
The lord loves him and he knows it
He will walk down the golden path everyday
With no worries, no pain
He will watch over his family
That he loves with all his heart
His family will miss him dearly
Now that he's gone
He is in the great world above
The place everyone has imagined all the days of their life
He's with the lord
The one above all things
Now that he's gone
He's an angel in the house of the lord everyday
Sitting with the lord
He's got the key to the gates of heaven
He's in a better place now
He's with the lord in the great place above
Now that he's gone
All his pain is gone
All his worries are in Gods hand
He's a member or the place like none other
He will walk down the golden path everyday
With no worries, no pain
In Memory of Jack Champion
06/25/44-06/16/09
By the way my Great Uncle Jack he died on his mothers birthday and a week before his birthday and he would have been 60 on 06-25-09 he died early but we know hes in a better place now