What do you think of my poem, Please be honest, I need to make this into haiku format...

manushi

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...pz help...? Thoughts of excitement and unsecure are the thoughts for me
Loneliness is my best friends and the wide open ocean talks
Nature sings to me but tall buildings and cars on the streets tease
Pictures are repeating more than thousand words
Memory is traveling in my head and my foot on roads
Leads me continuously to my heart and minds
The greatest distance between two points and I am at one
New dream new place everything is new
My beautiful Nepal you are my heart and at the other end
You are my memories, a beautiful one
So understand,
This is my home now where I am
 
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