what do you think of my poem? I NEED YOUR OPINION!?

That bright red rising sun
above the embedded horizontal run
shines through every crevice
rising the subject of belief
touching every with effect
worth eternal flawless pictures with no defect

Yet, those lay in dreams
when right above they sleep
scenery of sky lay in heap
places where you wish to leap
Nature supplies imaginary to keep

so why dare to sleep
when its more then a rise
its the beauties and inspiration of life
 
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