What do you think of my poem? Honest Opinions, Professional answers please?

Tig

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Outside my window
A shadow appears
Standing Still, Standing Still
Growing bigger
Walking Walking Walking
Closer Closer Closer
Picture the face, a familiar face
Those eyes, That nose, That Smile?
That smile, MY SMILE
They laugh.
That laugh, MY LAUGH
A laugh, something that cannot be copied
That face, it’s my face
Why that face? Why my face?
My face
Not yours
They move. The person moves
The person is spinning,
Spinning round
Round Round Round
This person is spinning
And laughing
No intention of stopping
Feel Dizzy
The person is spinning
Head hurting
Round and Round and Round
Laughing
Dizzy Dizzy Dizzy
Stop
Please please please
Leave and stop
Laugh Laugh Laugh
Please stop, leave
STOP!
They stop
Slowly
They raise their head
Their face
My face
Stops, and stares
Directly, at a similar face
My face.
why my face?
They walk
Come closer
No don’t
Don’t come any closer
Please! Why my face?
Leave!
WHY MY FACE?
Leave! LEAVE! PLEASE!
Smile, That’s mine, Why take mine?
Why my smile?
Face to Face
Through the window
Feel their breath
My breath
How?
Through that window
They come closer
Through that window
The window
Gone
Disappear
They walk through the window
arms Outstretched,
Touch
Feel their touch
Their arms, around my arms
Closer
And closer
Feel their warmth
Their arms
Hug
Pause
1, 2, 3, 4 and 5
Stop.
Pull away and
Stare
Smile
They smile
I smile
We smile
Thank you
They walk
Backwards
Through the window
They are a figure
merely a figure
my figure
Thank you again
Goodbye
Back into the dark
Into that darkness
Outside my window
 
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