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STEVEN M
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Hey there! My fourth love poem is in need of more thoughts and opinions. With the answers I've been recieving, I've been told that I did a good job with this piece. But let me know if anything is wrong so that I can fix certain problems. And if it is alright as it is then be sure to let me know that too so that I won't make any unnecessary changes. I am a 17 year old so don't be too harsh if it's a little rusty. Please be honest with your opinions and please enjoy!
I live for you...
When there is you,
My dread becomes past.
Light is abundant,
The dark cannot last.
The voice of your care,
To me it has spoken.
When upon me you smile,
I feel not broken.
I admire you so,
Words are unsaid.
They desire be heard,
But are silent instead.
Your eyes of kindness,
They are gentle as sea.
Tides so elegant,
Waves so heavenly.
Your purity of heart,
In none have I seen.
Sin is not found,
Your soul ever clean.
The wounds that I bear,
By your touch they heal.
The scars grow faded,
My sadness is sealed.
In the wake of your presence,
Pain becomes eased.
My sorrow is forgotten,
My emotions are pleased.
You are my northern star,
A guide with a glow.
When I’m lost in tears,
To you I can go.
My place is with you,
My only one home.
Grasp me in love,
And let me not roam.
Living without you,
A curse I won’t try.
I may live in your grace,
Or alone I shall die.
You bring about hope,
You hold me together.
My heart and my soul,
They are with you forever.
Love of my being,
Only you may see.
Very sincere I am,
Everything you are to me.
I live for you...
When there is you,
My dread becomes past.
Light is abundant,
The dark cannot last.
The voice of your care,
To me it has spoken.
When upon me you smile,
I feel not broken.
I admire you so,
Words are unsaid.
They desire be heard,
But are silent instead.
Your eyes of kindness,
They are gentle as sea.
Tides so elegant,
Waves so heavenly.
Your purity of heart,
In none have I seen.
Sin is not found,
Your soul ever clean.
The wounds that I bear,
By your touch they heal.
The scars grow faded,
My sadness is sealed.
In the wake of your presence,
Pain becomes eased.
My sorrow is forgotten,
My emotions are pleased.
You are my northern star,
A guide with a glow.
When I’m lost in tears,
To you I can go.
My place is with you,
My only one home.
Grasp me in love,
And let me not roam.
Living without you,
A curse I won’t try.
I may live in your grace,
Or alone I shall die.
You bring about hope,
You hold me together.
My heart and my soul,
They are with you forever.
Love of my being,
Only you may see.
Very sincere I am,
Everything you are to me.