what do you think, is a good poem or not. be honest?

Cuy

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A Letter To My Queen
My queen
the most beautiful of them all
whose eyes sparkle in the night
and blind whoever has them in their sight
whose smile light up the the sky
and laugh make the birds sing
whose delicate face causes the sun to rise
and the moon to set
whose kind voice will make volcanoes freeze
and oceans boil.


you my queen
for who i would lay anything on the line for
you have showed me many marvels
you showed me how to care
for a friend

because of you
i now know what desire is
a desire to want to be more than friends
to be the shoulder you lean on
a servant without question
one who will be with you
when your happy and need nothing
or when you need an ear to listen
or simply someone who will sit with you

in the rain sleet or hail
in the heat of summer
and the cold winter
next to you without ever moving

and now after all this time
the hardest lesson will be learned
to let go
i shall bother no longer
nor ask again
this will be my hardest class
and yet for you i hope i fail.

could you rate this in a 1-10. 1 being the lowest and 10 the highest. ima give this to a girl i like so please consider if it will make her feel wierd or if it will affend her. she had already said no to me so i want this to be my last try. also consider if it will acomplish the purpose of making her be my gf. thanks whoever is answeres the most aswered number and expains why they chose that number best will get the best aswere points
 
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