What do you think about this poem?

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Last Saturday, I was so bored. So I made two poems.
If you think my poem is great, answer this question. Oh and PLEASE people if you do not have anything nice to say, dont answer this question.
BTW, I'm just ten.LOL

Letting out my dream

I should've just scream

Writing a song

That makes me sing-along

Always Day Dreaming

And always screaming

Taking a picture

And putting them together

Want to meet famous stars

And play a guitar

I wanna rock on 'till the night end

Oh and yeah, with my best friend

Trying to get out of trouble

'Cause I'm always in the double

I know that is not part of the poem

But hey, I made a word and its "Kwoen"

It is really KNOW

But I dont have anything to show

Lets get out of that part

And make this poem by heart

I have a crush on Joe & Nick Jonas and David Henrie

Imagining myself with them. One, Two and Three

I want to be a famous singer

And seeing my pictures at Flickr

Maybe even buying shirts with my picture on Ebay

I know that will come true someday

Wait, I'm not yet done

No one ever looked at it yet, NONE

Hey maybe you're right

Its time to say Goodnight!

Me and My Best Friend

Me and my best friend
Are always here ‘till the end
We tell our secrets to each other
And sharing thoughts together
Having fun
While in the sun
We never fight
‘Cause we know what is right
We ask questions
That we may never again mention
She always gets me out of trouble
Yeah, I know, she is always on the double
My best friend never leaves me
She is always right there, see
We enjoys hanging out together
And also using the computer
Watch our favorite show on TV
Hey look, it’s our favorite actress Miley
Me and my best friend read books
Books that is off the hook
She also taught me how to make a charm bracelet
Maybe even those things called Anklet
We have the same favorite color
And it’s purple
I know that doesn’t rhyme
But I can do rhyming every time
Oh sorry, I got to go
I have to watch this show


Bye everyone! I gotta study my lessons for Hekasi or Social Studies.LOL
 
Have you listened to the song "I'm with you" by Avril Lavinge?? well, this poetry lyrics can be easily fit into the music of that song... that was the first thing which struck me...
hmmm.. interesting.. i enjoyed reading this, though the part till "it's time to say goodnight is better than me and my best friend!
good work!! keep going on..
I gotta go too..

i have my mails to see
i can do it now i m free
;-)
 
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