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Please give me feedback and if you can, some tips on how to make it better. This is a practice test and I'm still a freshman, but I want to make sure I perfect my writing skills by the time I take the SAT. I got a 5 on this, but I want some advice on how to make it a strong 6 
Ps. It's a little long, so if you don't want to read, by all means, don't. LOL.
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Question : Is deception ever justified?
My parents lied when they told me lying was wrong. Deception is one the many things that is keeping our lives together, like relationships,jobs and how others perceive us, so if the lie is for a good cause, deception is acceptable.
In my opinion, there are two different types of deception : a good "life saver" lie and a lie that once told, could ruin lives. Lies always help me in different situations and to be perfectly honest, I am quite good at it when the punishment is me getting into trouble with my teachers or worse, my parents. I don't lie when it is about a huge thing, like say, a big 'F' on a my final exam. I don't sink that low and besides, my conscience might get the better of me and I'll have to confess sooner or later. I lie about things that can either make or break relationship; these are the things I tend to lie about, nothing more, noting less. I remember a friend of mine asking me the oh-so common question, "Does my butt look big in this?". In my head, I would say, "Yes, it does!" but the words that come out of my mouth are the complete opposite, and I might say something along the lines of, "Girl, you look fierce!" Now that my friend, is a good lie.
Now about the plain wrong lie. It is not hard to do if one had no self-control but nonetheless, it does tend to be tricky. Take a happy couple, married for about twenty years. For argument's sake, let's say, the husband has fooled around with another woman--years ago--while still married to his wife. Had the husband told his wife that he had cheated on her, do you really think the couple would be together for all these years? Probably not.
To conclude, deception is an acceptable thing to do if the situation is not that big a deal. In the name of "being best friends forever", I say lying about the tight jeans is fine, but if it was about the big things that could affect a lifetime commitment to another person, that is when I draw the line.
Ps. It's a little long, so if you don't want to read, by all means, don't. LOL.***
Question : Is deception ever justified?
My parents lied when they told me lying was wrong. Deception is one the many things that is keeping our lives together, like relationships,jobs and how others perceive us, so if the lie is for a good cause, deception is acceptable.
In my opinion, there are two different types of deception : a good "life saver" lie and a lie that once told, could ruin lives. Lies always help me in different situations and to be perfectly honest, I am quite good at it when the punishment is me getting into trouble with my teachers or worse, my parents. I don't lie when it is about a huge thing, like say, a big 'F' on a my final exam. I don't sink that low and besides, my conscience might get the better of me and I'll have to confess sooner or later. I lie about things that can either make or break relationship; these are the things I tend to lie about, nothing more, noting less. I remember a friend of mine asking me the oh-so common question, "Does my butt look big in this?". In my head, I would say, "Yes, it does!" but the words that come out of my mouth are the complete opposite, and I might say something along the lines of, "Girl, you look fierce!" Now that my friend, is a good lie.
Now about the plain wrong lie. It is not hard to do if one had no self-control but nonetheless, it does tend to be tricky. Take a happy couple, married for about twenty years. For argument's sake, let's say, the husband has fooled around with another woman--years ago--while still married to his wife. Had the husband told his wife that he had cheated on her, do you really think the couple would be together for all these years? Probably not.
To conclude, deception is an acceptable thing to do if the situation is not that big a deal. In the name of "being best friends forever", I say lying about the tight jeans is fine, but if it was about the big things that could affect a lifetime commitment to another person, that is when I draw the line.