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rustedfromtherain<3
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alright , so these are the first two poems i ever acually written .
and - there for school.
& , i was just wondering what you guys thought about them.
feel free to be mean .
first one . ;
Looking up at the stars , tying together shapes with the distant bright lights.
Oh ,what beautiful constellations. The shadows are creeping up, compelling me to feel enclosure.
Long deep breaths, a chill making its way down my spine.
Heart thumping slowly, one beat at a time -
everything stops.
Now the air becomes stifling , and as my feet come off the ground, and my body floats into the blanket of night, everything around me seam’s to be at peace.
The moon lay in the midnight sky, bright lights scintillating.
Oh ,what beautiful constellations.
kahy , second one;
As I stand here in this open meadow - I feel as if the world on its own is collapsing.
All living things feel the need to dispute - fight over meaningless topics , argue about the unknown.
And I watch as it happens - wishing that I , somehow , could stop it.
Looking up at the sky, clouds and shapes slowly drift by, and I know that everyone’s future will be left in ruins.
A cool wind blows , sending me shivers throughout my body, and I can’t help to picture our world at peace.
No war , no world hunger, no polluting the earth or even our minds, and everyone treating each other equally.
As I begin to twirl about in this high matted grass - I realize just how peaceful everything around me really is. All worries in my mind seem to go away, and this is how I wished the world was really like.
But for now we can pretend that everything’s okay , and that we’re all happy.
and - there for school.
& , i was just wondering what you guys thought about them.
feel free to be mean .
first one . ;
Looking up at the stars , tying together shapes with the distant bright lights.
Oh ,what beautiful constellations. The shadows are creeping up, compelling me to feel enclosure.
Long deep breaths, a chill making its way down my spine.
Heart thumping slowly, one beat at a time -
everything stops.
Now the air becomes stifling , and as my feet come off the ground, and my body floats into the blanket of night, everything around me seam’s to be at peace.
The moon lay in the midnight sky, bright lights scintillating.
Oh ,what beautiful constellations.
kahy , second one;
As I stand here in this open meadow - I feel as if the world on its own is collapsing.
All living things feel the need to dispute - fight over meaningless topics , argue about the unknown.
And I watch as it happens - wishing that I , somehow , could stop it.
Looking up at the sky, clouds and shapes slowly drift by, and I know that everyone’s future will be left in ruins.
A cool wind blows , sending me shivers throughout my body, and I can’t help to picture our world at peace.
No war , no world hunger, no polluting the earth or even our minds, and everyone treating each other equally.
As I begin to twirl about in this high matted grass - I realize just how peaceful everything around me really is. All worries in my mind seem to go away, and this is how I wished the world was really like.
But for now we can pretend that everything’s okay , and that we’re all happy.