what do you think about my poem be honest?

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Jessika <wit a k>

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judgemental,hypocritical,vicious
though we try to deny it we are
all the same we all have atleast
5% of each of these items in us
some use it 100% of the time
some 50% n others 20% or 10%
its sad how these hypocritical
judgemental vicious people get
all the glory regardless of the
hurt they might cause, how do people
praise them n follow them knowing
that anyday they can become a part
of their evil games. we are all
human and are a victim of mistakes
n imperfection why do some punks
gotta come n rub it in our face
dont they have imperfections too?
SURE SURE they DO probly more then
we do. we have all been caught up
in these games at one point or another
i say fuck'em fuck'em all.
acceptance,humbleness, honesty
is the new cool we all have it in us
lets cause joy instead of pain
sunlight instead of rain
pride instead of shame
-Jessika
 
Not only is the poem as "you" call it, rubbish. but the statements it makes are absolute garbage. You have absolutely nothing going for you artistically so don't be giving up your shelf-stacking job. That is, if you are holding one down.
I know that you will be saying, this guy is only proving my point, but in your case, it is sadly true.
Sorry, but you did ask for honesty
 
its pretty good. keep it up
would you look at mine?
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=Aoq0kRwvpBcTVzT98aS39atp.Bd.;_ylv=3?qid=20081017000424AACOaGj
 
sure sure, it doesnt seem to look like a poem and some words seem lazy but i couldnt get the sense of the fuck'em part. you know how yahoo is
 
Your poem sounds a bit angry as if someone has hurt you and unjustly judged you. Like you say most of us are judging others when we should be looking at the other fingers pointing back at ourselves when we are pointing out other people inadequacies. You mentioned acceptance. This is good because sometimes we need to understand why people have these negative ways. Humility is difficult and seems to be the opposite to proud. Can we be proud of our humility? Honesty truly is the best policy and the best poems spring out of sincere hearts in my opinion.
 
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