What do you think about my poem (3 quatrains) about death? Read and comment? Suggest changes?

Eli

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My poem is a Dickinson mimic. It has a rhyme scheme of ABCB... Please read comment, and suggest your changes.

Today was a stormy day,
Dark clouds bellowed in the sky.
The corpse was a resting sloth,
The smell of flesh hurts the eye.

As bones sink into dirt --
Shedding tears, we remember.
A black rose grows out of the skull --
Like the coldness of December.

Lifted by angels, saved from fiery pits,
A possibility of eternal life.
Nowhere, no one ever knows,
Because there is a strife.
 
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