What are your thoughts on my new verse? I've been rapping for 11 months...?

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Bandido

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This is a preview of a new song I made. Rate it out of 10. I know the beat is kinda whack, but I didn't choose it. It's for an upcoming cypher with some friends. Anyway, should it be rerecorded? The other verses are coming soon!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0co36wqfAhM
Heres the lyrics if you want to follow along...


"Flowing like a navy ship
‘Didos spittin’ crazy ****
To rap I’m like a safety kit
Healing what them babies did
Ruining rap deliberately
You ******* failed miserably
You will now be history
Cats who can rhyme diminish thee
So Here we go yall, we gotta show them what’s up
This is enough, They actin’ hard, waving their nuts
Then we call the bluff, call out the troops unleash warfare
Against us, the only hope they have is the lords prayer
And I know this ain’t fair, but I’m exterminating you
You’ll be running out of air, ***** I turn the people blue
Only real MC’s can breath, Call me Co2
I’m a cannibal myself, It’s a reaction to being true
Bandido’s got a kilo, got a lot of rhymes on his mind
When I spit the stars align, rap is ******* redefined
So with all these rappers combined
We cock a loogy with our minds
The best cypher anyone’s spit
Since BET 2009.
My name is Bandido, I got the flow
I want all of you to know
That with this tra
 
the begging and end need some work, but the middle goes hard...i'd give it a 61/2 out of 10...if i was rating just the middle from "You ******* failed miserably" to "When I spit the stars align, rap is ******* redefined" i'd give it an 8 out of 10...keep working your pretty talented
 
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