What about the ones left behind. A poem?

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Your Past

Your like a shadow
in the future
going places I've not been
Try to bend
around the corners
end up doubling back again
Where you see
a lighted tunnel
I see shadows in the hall
While you run off
to find tomorrow
I'm still learning how to crawl
Do you ever look behind you
see my struggle to keep pace
pretending not to notice

when I stumble
...turn your face
 
I liked reading this because of how nice it flowed along...I also like how you ended it ...slowing it down to emphasize the last 2 lines......nicely done
 
Your or 'you're' in the first line? Interesting in that one's past can often lead one by reputation if nothing more. I liked your ending.
 
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