I just received an audition notice from my school and was told for further information to email the director. I just wanted opinions on my email if it sounded too sucky or if I should change my wording. All input greatly appreciated 
My email
"Hi,
My name is Brittany, currently a PAS student with Verve Studios. Upon receiving an email from Hayley the other day regarding the upcoming production of Blood I felt the urge to find out more.
I am keen on auditioning and was hoping to have the opportunity to do so, and also to find out perhaps a little of bit more about the play and if there is a particular "way" I should audition.
Thanks for your time,
Hope to hear from you soon.
Brittany"
My email
"Hi,
My name is Brittany, currently a PAS student with Verve Studios. Upon receiving an email from Hayley the other day regarding the upcoming production of Blood I felt the urge to find out more.
I am keen on auditioning and was hoping to have the opportunity to do so, and also to find out perhaps a little of bit more about the play and if there is a particular "way" I should audition.
Thanks for your time,
Hope to hear from you soon.
Brittany"