Villanelle help please?

A R

New member
I have written this villanelle please can you let me know what you think and if you think I can improve it in anyway. I did not choose the easiest words to rhyme. I need to put in capitals and punctuation

at last the drought has been broken
a month has passed each day i wrote
contact made our loves unbroken

thirty days we have not spoken
lifes passing by i am afloat
at last the drought has been broken

some think notes are just a token
reading them with glee as they gloat
contact made our loves unbroken

it came this morning as i woke
full of words which my husband wrote
at last the drought has been broken

across the miles came this token
a lump was forming in my throat
contact made our loves unbroken

i feel alive i've awoken
upon the mat there lays a note
at last the drought has been broken
contact made our loves unbroken
 
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