Untitled: Number #5

[Philip M]

Let me lace your shoes and tie
These girls and sighs, black silken worRAB
The world inside those curls
An icy jade like glistening twine
Thick bristles through thin knots and hurled
You let me lace your shoes and tied
Our race to pay the bills on time
My cornered palms wipe liquid pearls
The world invites those curls
With lither swine who twirl and cry
"Oh take my life, lest for a whirl"
And let me lace your shoes and tie
Misshapen steeRAB 'neath tempered knights
Berceuse-ian lullabies unfurled
The world caressed inside those curls
But first, your hand embraces mine
In gentle kiss, on borrowed time
It begs me, "place your mood inside…"
This world is mine is mine is yours

So close your weary eyes and try
And try to get some sleep.

 

[wouldupleasetiemeup814]

To AAA, and foreverendeared:

It's been too long. I have much critiquing/reading/appreciating to catch up on.

 

[asparagus_tr]

hmmmm I am a little confused on the subject matter. I sense a little sex with some pain....errr.

Help me out and ill throw a better critique up.

 

[KyleC767]

Nah your good bro, hit it up at your pace. Ya been busy and shiz it happens.

 

[RBnumber20]

yeah this one seems overtly sexual, but i like it a lot. It flows nicely.