This is my BLURB for my book, read it and let me know how I could change it?

I put up this question before, but all I got was JUDGING!
1. I write the blurb first so when people ask what I am writing about I can show them that.
2. I write the outline of the whole book next.
3. I start my story.
4. My title comes in right at the end.
5. DONT JUDGE ME, shit!

This is my blurb, the things that are in brackets dont really make sense to me, but I dont know how I could word it any better.

BLURB:
Scarlett Matthews is a fifteen-year-old orphan whose main stability through a (mishap) childhood was her best friend Autumn Winslow, until Scarletts' mother died (Until her mother died, sounds weird to me but that's how it is, any ideas like I dont know something good to put here.. after until scarletts mother died. :/ i cant think HELP?). (When Scarlett is forced to overcome her mothers death) it catapultes her into a world in which she feels she doesn't belong. With memories of the past and the rekindling of an old friendship, Scarlett struggles to find her own world. Rejecting her impulses becomes impossible as Scarlett finds herself struggling with love, loss and secret passions.


Seriously dont judge me on the fact Im doing my blurb FIRST!
It wont have MISHAP anymore, it will be straight like this -
Scarlett Matthews is a fifteen-year-old orphan whose main stability through childhood was her bestfriend... yeah :)
THE STUFF IN BRACKETS IS THE STUFF I NEED HELP WITH GUYS :)<3
 
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