This is a poem I wrote could you comment on it?

Take One Back

Swimming on the Dragons back
my mind begins to race

Swimming on the Dragons back
the cloud's begin to take shape

I reach before I die I swim before I cry

I'm set down where there is no time
Where millions of faces look to there mind

Swimming on the Dragons back there
Hearts begin to race

Until all the Dragons have taken us
To the feathered angelic place

Letting us see we are all one face
 
wow..excellent poem sir..
great thinking..a very unique words used in your poems..i love it..thanks for sharing it..
 
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